Consistency: Consider writing out 200 as 'two hundred' as you wrote our 'four' in "four lobes".
A MRI-based computer - I would recommend rewriting this sentence as it is a bit of a run-on. Something akin to 'A computer speaker interface should be connected by MRI to each of RPC-XXX's four cerebral lobes'
If you don't rewrite it, it should be "in place, allowing" without the 'for'
- unless for interviewing purposes only
Except when it is necessary for RPC-XXX to communicate for interviews
interpret the
microscopic
Consistency: sixteen years
's death
Consistency: this one you can get away with but I would replace it with 'third trimester' anyway. Consider getting more specific, since a third trimester baby can be anywhere from basically formed to mostly fetal.
Consistency: replace XX with ██ but I'm not sure why you would give month/year but not day.
to all non-anomalous means of destruction.
Consistency: replace XX with ██
It's not a crime to repeat the use of words, but using the same phrase 'unknown means' twice so quickly is inadvisable unless it is to serve a specific narrative function. Consider 'the method used to survive was indeterminate'
Consistency: fifteen
Consistency: RPC-XXX doesn't actually know words and this one is a very specific one to learn through conversation, something like 'it has been forever' feels more appropriate, since forever is a common word with an emotional connotation (you can feel forever) while millennium isn't.
Consistency: in this case, 'type Θ blood' would be more consistent with medical convention, rather than 'Type Θ blood'.
- Imidazole, Benzimidazole, Histidine
Consistency: chemical names are never deliberately capitalized; treat them as you would any common noun. Consider adding footnotes with reasons these for might be important, even fabricated.
Consistency: while the personal feelings of researchers writing these entries can seep into the subtext, both of these sentences are outside of the Quote from Researcher ████ and are not signed to any specific person as 'personal opinion'. You can do this by tabbing the paragraph once and ending it with "-Dr. ███████" or the like.