1. "If an RPC-XXXX-2 instance is left alone for a prolonged amount of time, they will develop some sort of subconscious attraction."
Get rid of "some sort" nowhere near clinical enough.
2. "6 of the pews within are seared with burn marks"
Make "6" into"six." Any number under 10 isn't supposed to mentioned as the actual number. But that's a style thing honestly. Up to you.
3. In the journal I notice you capitalize "It" and "Them." Sometimes you don't and I'm not sure if it's on purpose. I would say capitalize it every time or not at all when referring to it.
4. When referring to the prayer positions, it assumes everyone follows a religion. I would add something for people who never followed a religion.
5. Having the interviewer refer to the RPC-XXXX-2 as #29 is not really correct. Just censor their name.
6. Why is the picture of the church the Authority has of the church before the fire? Probably better to say after.
That's just some stuff I noticed. Really nice job on this though! Can't want to see it on the main site!